THE CLIENT'S OFFICE—
Oh my gosh, so I finished reading your script and I absolutely loved it! But—and this is a very small “but”—I just want to change one little everything.
Here’s a list of my comments. I know it seems like a lot, but if you read through all 17 pages, you’ll realize there really aren’t that many changes.
I honestly think we have award-winning stuff here. It’s just that teensy bit between the first frame and the end card that we need to cut. No seriously, aside from the entire concept, this script is gold. And yeah, the copy and art direction definitely have to go. But besides that, this might be your best work yet!
If you’re confused, here’s an example of what I’m looking for. It’s just a little something I threw together that’s already been storyboarded, submitted for a production estimate, and that we finished casting for yesterday.
I mean, don’t use exactly what I wrote. Haha, of course not. I’m not a writer. You’re the creative genius! I just want something like this meticulously outlined, leather-bound script that’s been approved by our CEO and is scheduled to shoot next week.
Do you need some inspiration? No problem. Just go to this address that our location scout secured and get those creative juices flowing!
Anyway, it’s ok if you don’t make it to the shoot. I just booked an agency review, so we’ll catch up then!